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PostPosted: Sat Jan 20, 2007 5:13 am
 


[I][align=center]
I hear the whispered knocking of the
pre-dawn wind as it strives to curve
around the house. So subtle it seems
like a distant memory that was shoved
back into my mind.

With coffee cup in hand I turn inwards
to re-connect to the dripping blood
that flows within my veins. I am a
forgotten moment of dissent washed
away in a stream of dropping pretence.

I used to wonder why I felt so alone
in the company of friends. My words
a carefully studied indifference that
masked the naked need I resented.
Suspecting that I am only as alone as
I allow myself to be.

Still the morning light

will find me questioning the situations
of the coming day. And though I age
with indifference I am different from
the boy I used to be. That shadows of
past illustrates the foundation of
today
which I
shall accept as my perspective
as I refuse to grieve for faces lost
along the way. Tears may flow,
and surely they have been here before;
but I shall suppress them and hate
the weakness they represent. I understand

only that I am victim to no-one but
myself. A breath in and a breath out,
and yet still I cannot find the courage to
confess the tinge of emptiness that should
be wiped away from my mind. Gently I
allow the pre-dawn world to wrap itself
around the tissue paper of my convictions.

I am strong, but the weakness within
will be my undoing. [/align]


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PostPosted: Sat Jan 20, 2007 5:31 am
 


I like it.


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PostPosted: Sat Jan 20, 2007 8:29 am
 


Sapper wrote:
I like it.


Thank you!





PostPosted: Sat Jan 20, 2007 9:28 am
 


I like it too,you write that?


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PostPosted: Sat Jan 20, 2007 10:02 am
 


ziggy wrote:
I like it too,you write that?


Yes of course, why else would I put it up :wink:





PostPosted: Sat Jan 20, 2007 10:04 am
 


fcgv wrote:
ziggy wrote:
I like it too,you write that?


Yes of course, why else would I put it up :wink:


I dont know,some people do that. 8)


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PostPosted: Sat Jan 20, 2007 12:01 pm
 


I want to ask questions ... on certain stanzas why??? but I think I prefer to interpret them on my own terms.


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PostPosted: Sat Jan 20, 2007 2:14 pm
 


I feel like a beast subdued by music. And truely I am more like a beast.


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PostPosted: Sat Jan 20, 2007 6:14 pm
 


i love poetry!

The opening stanza was masterfully painted ... it conveyed a feeling and emotion as well as a scene. i feel the wind and the shiver it brings.

The poem is insiteful and shows a cetain level of awareness that the poet has for his life and his connection to it.

i really like it.


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